Daughters are very special people

Feels like yesterday that I held you in my arms
Feels like yesterday that you first held my hand
An angel sent from heaven, with the whoosh of His wand
Your soft tinkling laughter made cold nights feel warm

Feels like yesterday that you first walked up to school
Feels like yesterday you made my first treasured card
A hurricane like no other, though you swooshed breaking every rule
Your sad puppy dog eyes could make yelling mighty hard

Feels like yesterday that you passed your first school test
Feels like yesterday that you ran your first long race
A winner from day one, to us you were the best
Your frown of concentration could make us smile a trace

Feels like yesterday that your phone rang all day long
Feels like yesterday that young lads over you brawled
A looker, one with brains, you knew what’s right from wrong
Your wit could make you charming, to one and all behold

Feels like yesterday that you got that big dream job
Feels like yesterday that you faced dark gloomy days
A fighter from the start, you rose above it all
Your will and determination could make tall mountains crawl

Summers came and summers went
Seasons changed and turned to years
Our bundle of joy, our angel heaven sent
Has transformed into a young princess

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6 thoughts on “Daughters are very special people

  1. Much as I love this poem, I’ll leave you a critique. Do not think me harsh, I wish only to see you excel, and of course, to improve my own abilities. 🙂 The intention is not to pick you or your work apart. The words in this poem moved me deeply. This is my humble way of giving back. Please do remember that I’m not much of a poet, and I have a lot to learn, so you might find errors below. If you do, please let me know. 🙂

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    1. “A hurricane like no other, though you swooshed breaking every rule
    Your sad puppy dog eyes could make yelling mighty hard”

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    2. “A looker, one with brains, you knew what’s right from wrong
    Your wit could make you charming, to one and all behold”

    Honestly, in its current form, the words aren’t used quite right, IMHO. The correction is pretty difficult, but I’ll give it a shot.

    The first line will get shorter with a fix, so this probably means re-thinking the line entirely or adjusting the entire verse.

    As a potential fix to the length –

    I still don’t like what I’ve done here, but I hope that you’ll glean some benefit from it.

    The second line-

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    Finally, I have a question. Why did you break from the rhyme scheme for the very last verse? Was it done as a close, as if a parent is speaking to their daughter?

    Thank you for this beautiful poem.

  2. If you can’t recover the original text, do you mind deleting my comments here? Most of what I had to say got lost because WordPress does some pretty weird things to what I write. I’ll re-comment or just tell you what I meant. As of now, all my suggestions have gone for a six. Sorry about the bother.

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